A headline on a weblog post is a differentiator — this entry is different from all the others — but that’s not a very useful lens for understanding headlines. A serial number — A37592x — is a differentiator, too.
A headline can serve the same purpose as a headline in the newspaper, as a brief summary of the succeeding content — “Man kills wife, kids, self.”
That’s a useful function, but it’s not really doing the job we want a headline on a blog post to do.
Here’s a better way of understanding the communicative purpose of a weblog entry’s headline:
A headline is a testament from the writer to the reader than the content described in the headline is accurately reflected by that headline and that reading that content will repay the effort it entails.
But that’s still not enough. A headline on a weblog post, and on any persuasive copy, has to ensnare and entice the reader. The headline has to promise a substantive benefit that the reader will realize by pursuing the copy. Writing an effective headline is very much a Direct Marketing problem.
And we’re not done even yet. In addition to all the jobs it must undertake in the reader’s behalf, a well-written weblog headline should also engage horizontal search engines in meaningful ways.
So a properly-crafted weblog headline will:
- Summarize the content in an interesting way
- Promise the reader a practical benefit for reading that content
- Search well on the most-significant keywords in that content
That’s a big load to carry, but a good headline can make a post, where a bad one can break it.
I don’t want to represent myself as a good example, because I will frequently opt for clever rather than good, but the headline of this post is a nice example of a good headline: It tells you what I’m going to talk about, it tells you how you will gain by reading this post, and it is strong on keywords that are likely to be searched by people who may have an interest in BloodhoundBlog’s ongoing content.
The latter point is important. It’s easy to score well on long-tail search terms, but if they don’t bring you the people you want to recruit as readers and convert as clients, you’re spinning your wheels.
Relevance, to Google, is the title tag plus the headline plus the body copy. If your title tag reflects you headline (about which more soon), and if your body copy corresponds to your headline, then Google will regard your page as being highly relevant. If it happens to be highly relevant to your mission in real estate, then you’ve done the job right.
Let’s pick on some Bloodhounds to illustrate what we’re talking about.
Yesterday Doug Quance gave us:
Elections Really DO Have Consequences
What might work better? How about:
Recent Supreme Court decisions demonstrate the importance of picking the right President: Elections really do have consequences
A better summary, an implied promise of benefit and better search terms. The search keywords are off-topic for real estate, but we have a wider latitude than a purely-commercial real estate weblog. Nothing human is alien to BloodhoundBlog.
Teri Lussier graced us with:
Project Bloodhound: And they called it puppy love
I like it better this way:
They call it puppy love: Six frisky young pups join the dog-pound for Project Bloodhound — a chance for all of us to learn and grow
Summary? Yes. Promise? Yes. Searchable? Kinda-sorta. Let’s try it again.
They call it puppy love: Six frisky young pups join BloodhoundBlog for Project Bloodhound — a colloquium on Social Media Marketing for hounds of all pedigrees
That will search on Social Media Marketing, one of our choice keywords.
Sean posted an entry called:
Custom Signs and Brake Lights
This is really opaque, but perhaps it’s so opaque that people had to click through to find out what it was about.
Here’s another approach to the same post:
Do you want to see cars slow down when they catch sight of your real estate listings? Nothing stops traffic like a custom yard sign
Summary, benefit and search keywords, all in one headline.
Eric Blackwell wrote a gracious and beautiful post about Charles Richey’s illness, but I want to put Eric in the hospital for this headline:
As a personal favor…
No summary, no benefit, no search. What would work better?
How about this?
When you needed his help, Charles Richey was always there for you. Now he needs you to be there for him. Join me in helping Charles and his family as he recovers from a devastating illness.
The summary is there. The benefit is group cohesion. And this headline will search strong on Charles Richey.
Not to put too fine a point on it, but I’m also writing for length. One line of a headline on BloodhoundBlog is about 68 characters, so I’m trying to fill out the lines as I write.
You will note that I am not taking any special pains to be brief. If I can say what I want to say in one line, I will, but I don’t hesitate to take three lines if that’s what’s needed. There is no benefit to anyone in doing less than the whole job.
And here’s another conundrum: Which comes first, the headline or the body text? I will often write the headline first, so I have a clear idea on the promise I plan to deliver on. But it can happen that I will end up writing something different than I had planned — in which case I simply rewrite the headline.
Everything is hard when it’s unfamiliar, and it might seem especially cruel of me to ask you to spend even more time on your headlines when you’re already obsessing over your text. But a few moments of extra time thinking about how to write an accurate, engaging and searchable headline will pay huge dividends in readership, comments and — it is to be hoped — commerce.
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Teri Lussier says:
Thanks for taking up this subject. I struggle with headlines nearly every time I blog. I do an okay job of writing copy, but headline writing is a horror to me and I often cringe to see the lame things I come up with. I can only imagine what my readers think.
My blog template does not allow for long headlines so while I try for short and snappy, it typically falls short. π
Geno writes short headlines, but they are quite clever and make me want to read more. They may not be particularly useful in terms of SEO, but they are effective at piquing my curiosity, and he delivers.
Having said all that… Once a post is published, can I change it months down the road if I come up with a better headline?
June 27, 2008 — 8:18 am
Greg Swann says:
> Once a post is published, can I change it months down the road if I come up with a better headline?
Yes, of course. I change my headlines (and my body copy) all the time.
June 27, 2008 — 8:20 am
Mark Eckenrode says:
hey greg, i like what you’re getting at but not a fan if your implementation.
blog headlines, much like email subject lines (something near and dear to my heart) do need to capture attention. They’re the A in AIDA (Attention, Interest, Desire, Action)… a headline that fails in this regards is a blogpost that wasn’t worth writing because you cut down your reach (SEO and people-wise).
I don’t agree on the point of summarizing… why would i want to read the whole thing if i get the whole gist from the headline (post title)?
general rules of thumb when writing a headline (email subject line, blog post title, report title, etc):
1) ask a question that can only be answered in the body copy
2) say something controversial
3) create curiosity
4) promise a big benefit that only the body copy can deliver
as far as which comes first, that is a tough one. sometimes a title will pop into my head and “that rocks. need to write something so i can use that.” but often times, i’ll write the post and select a line from the body and massage it into a title.
June 27, 2008 — 8:28 am
Mark Eckenrode says:
@ greg & @teri – i think it’s totally fine changing the headline after the fact but those who use permalinks built upon the post title may want to be careful here since you can break incoming links
June 27, 2008 — 8:31 am
Michelle DeRepentigny says:
I tend to go for sensationalism when I write industry targeted post but on my local blog almost every headline is a formula: city (or area), state and a brief overview.
Greg, I struggled with my first PBII headline and went with a teaser – I really wish you would feel free to pick on me/it. π
June 27, 2008 — 9:15 am
Stephanie Edwards-Musa says:
Thanks Greg, for the tips. Headlines are always something that I fight with, trying to choose which one to use.
Is there a point when they can be too long? That’s something I always worry about.
June 27, 2008 — 3:19 pm
Mark Eckenrode says:
@stephanie: studies and stats show headlines of 80 to 131 characters get the best response. keep in mind this is for salescopy. perhaps start with that and test different lengths, monitoring your logs to see what gets the most clicks.
of course, twitter would be perfect to test your headlines in π
June 27, 2008 — 3:37 pm
AndrewG says:
Those headlines are too long winded. I know you goal is to please google, but pleasing google and engaging the reader are two separate things. And a headline that’s a paragraph is boring. What next: using code instead of English in your blog headlines.
June 27, 2008 — 6:09 pm
Erion Shehaj says:
To be honest, I find Bloodhound headlines the least attractive part of this great blog. The writing is outstanding, coverage of important topics excellent, and “breakage” of news on point.
Headlines. Not so much.
If you need proof that a short headline is often times better, you need to look no further than Seth Godin.
June 28, 2008 — 12:56 pm
Matt McGee says:
My unsolicited advice would be to shorten the headlines you use substantially, Gregg. I love a clever turn of phrase as much as anyone, but for catching the attention of both users and search engines, they really should be shorter than the suggestions you shared.
Using the “Social Media Marketing” one as an example — that headline won’t search on the keyphrase because the headline runs 25 words and 158 characters long, and the keyphrase doesn’t show up until character 109. Keywords should be as close to the front of the headline and page title as possible. Something like this might work better:
Social Media Marketing for Real Estate: Six new pups join Project Bloodhound
Frankly, I’d rather see “agents” instead of “pups” in there (so that the phrase “real estate agents” can be found in the headline), but I realize you’re going for branding with the pup analogy. π
June 28, 2008 — 10:43 pm
Matt McGee says:
Whoops. Looks like I stuck an extra “g” into your name, Greg. Sorry ’bout that.
June 28, 2008 — 10:45 pm